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--Mark Hill 13:59, 9 June 2009 (EST) I have moved the first reviewers comments below from the top of your project page to here.

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The protein has been extensively outline in a scientific manner which is great , by more time should have gone in to explaining the specfic function of the protein the human body and what happens to this protein if the protein has been altered, or damaged through specfic mutations. the abbrevation should be more focused on as indivduals (reviewers) are unawre of the unstated name are as the toopic is new to them. otherwise the assignnment has been outlined at a good stated in relation to the guidelines.


Review:

(A) --Anna Cao 12:36, 21 May 2009 (EST) I like your structure, however, I suggest you move the time line to the top so it flows more readily. Maybe you could move it to before or after the introduction. Also you could add comments about the time line. What is it that you want the viewer to understand? (Maybe that p53 has a long history of research because ....). The Glossary is a good idea to explain concepts and I had to refer to it as I read your page. Good work!

(B) I agree with Anna, it would be good if you could highlight why the history of p53 was significant enough for you to include it on your page. Like the overall layout, the diagrams are excellent and content is obviously thouroughly researched. Well done overall.

(C) Firstly, i loved how you structured your page, it is clear and easy to follow through, you have successfully used Wikipedia's potential. Overall the content seems to be very comprehensive but I was hoping if you can relate structure back to its function

(D) The wya you have broken down the project into multiple subheadining with accompanying sub-bullets is really good. It outlines the information really well without looking very boring. The pictures support the texts very well. Also, your glossary has been very useful in the understanding of the topic. but then, you have a heading saying timeline and no information seems to be posted. you may either just take out the heading or add something underneath it. Job well done!

(E). A very well structured and informative page. the format you used made the content easy to follow and understand and the diagrams are great. I understand what you have done with the timeline but i think you should either make it bigger so that it stand out a bit more or add a few sentences under the heading which you can refer back to the timeline from, because at first i thought there was no timeline only a heading. otherwise great effort.

(F)The layout of your page is very good, the multiple subheadings make it easy to read and the general flow of information is good. The timeline could probably be moved to an earlier section on the page, possibly after the introduction so as to clarify the relevance and significance of the tp53 gene. Speaking of, you could put the link to your group project into that section as well. Good job overall!

(G) Your page is very interesting. The flow also works and well structured. I really think you have reached all the requirement. Probably under the current research subheading, you can introduce whom you referring too instead of just stating the name of the journal? However it'a good piece of writing overall. (3222840)

(H) I think your page is very well organized and the flow is very well. The use of bullet points is really good to avoid too many texts. I found the problem with the timeline as well, maybe you can put it right under the subheading and have it bigger so that easier to comprehend. (3221652)

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You have now created your individual project page.

--Mark Hill 09:23, 20 April 2009 (EST) Need to identify the protein you have selected for your indivdual project.

--Mark Hill 09:24, 16 April 2009 (EST) You seem to be on track. Lecture 10 - Cytoskeleton 1 Intermediate Filaments, yes the intermediate filaments, formed from keratin make special desmosome junctions, which give the layer its name "Stratum Spinosum".

--Mark Hill 09:20, 19 March 2009 (EST) Thanks for your feedback. These 2 functional compartments are quite interesting. It draws attention to the changing nomenclature (naming) of cellular components as we learn more about them, even as for PMLs if we don't know exactly what they do. --Mark Hill 19:21, 26 March 2009 (EST) The Golgi Apparatus is not a "protein factory" as they do not produce any protein, they only "modify" pre-existing proteins, manufactred in the endoplasmic reticulum. No direct connection with nucleus or DNA transcribing into mRNA.

--Mark Hill 10:41, 3 April 2009 (EST) Your homework answers are fine. For mitochondria, I wanted you to realise that processes within the mitochondria requiring energy and we will find mitochondria located near where these processes occur within the cell.

3161979, your project read very nicely. It was easy to following and you benefitted well in having clear subheading, i.e. structure and function. Perhaps a bit more of an explanation of the history would have been useful. Well done.