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Your individual project well organized, the use of subheadings is really good and easy to comprehend. However, your project seems to be rather long, less significant information such as the three caspase categories can be shortened. (3221652)
Latest revision as of 19:45, 24 May 2009
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- Hi there. I like how your page has subheadings so that the text is divided into sections and is not too text-heavy (problem with many others i reviewed). However, some section only has few words, such as Actions. Maybe consider expanding it bit more or just try and merge with related section... Also, the text is well referenced but the image does not have any info/ source/ copyright info etc.... Even if it is a student drawn figure, it still requires the previously mentioned infomation...
A. The content shows extensive research which is great. More pictures to demonstrate things such as structure would be helpful in backing up the text you've written. Perhaps the caspase overview could be shortened so that you can focus more on caspase 3. Finally, the opening sentence has the word 'removal' in it quite a bit - I think it'd be good to rephrase it. Good work so far and good luck!
B The topic of caspases has been generally provided in great detail covering major aspects of its function. It appears that you are one of the very few students that have created an image through adaptation of the knowledge that you have gained through researching this topic. It is also ideal that you have inserted a general overview of caspases as it allows drawing a comparison of the basic tasks of caspases and the specific role of caspases. All aspects of the criteria seem to have been met although the sentence structure can be improved upon. Don't forget to add a link to your Group Project because apparently it is required. - z3224479
C: Your intro is pretty long - you could just leave out the dysregulations part and leave it for the further heading. A diagram of the structure would be helpful. The third paragraph could be much easier to read if you use dot points to definte the groups. You've included a lot of information which is good and shows you have good knowledge on the topic, however you should watch the word count, it is pretty long. Well done though, really good info!
D: Your individual project well organized, the use of subheadings is really good and easy to comprehend. However, your project seems to be rather long, less significant information such as the three caspase categories can be shortened. (3221652)
You have now created your individual project page.
--Mark Hill 18:55, 12 May 2009 (EST) Your homework items are not all done and your individual project has only headings (due week 10) and is also way behind schedule. If you are having difficulties, you should have spoken to me at an earlier stage.
--Mark Hill 09:17, 16 April 2009 (EST) You have not yet selected your individual project protein/method topic and still missing some homework items. 2009_Student#Individual_Projects Individual Projects